My article has several distracting points which is good, but it’s still not very clear. I need to develop all my analysis perspective more specifically. And also, I should write more details into my opinion. And it is better if I add some examples to strengthen my point of view in my points.
Second, I need to find a lot of references and using the ideas in other authors’ articles to prove my argument.
Third, the using of grammar and words needs to be improved so that I can do my best to make my article look more professional. And I feel that I need to find a lot of advantages and disadvantages of online corporate training to form a hedge that makes my article look more talkative.
Then I should focus on my point of view. And posting some of my views on these strengths and weaknesses.